Post Match
After the roar and the grunt
of the thundering masses -
the players look small.
The silence is stark in the stalls; on the pitch;
in locker room showers where the cleaner is finished –
but surprised by the shirts.
They always looked small on the telly
but she thought they’d be larger up close.
Not tiny and flattened like pieces of litter
she thought they were flyers but then she saw collars
and paper ripped hems. Yes –
the woman thought players were usually Goliaths,
hulking great giants, leviathan fired
and muscled with rope.
She never thought they were all
Tiny Tom Thumb-kneed – with runner bean lungs’
and tops made from boxes of emptied out fags
She held one up between two palms,
tapped its little cardboard arms, thought:
who’d have known it …just a slip and all that fuss?
She traced the Victory on one’s chest,
Smoothed poor Park Road’s rained on crest,
kissed Hans Solo, tickled Real.
She hooked her post match boys in pockets,
slipped them in her jeans and jacket – The Football World’s
first woman gov’nor –
some days she let them play for cups.

I just want to say that I think you have a very nice blog, I´ve just read through it all.
This is looking good! x
Thanks Pammy – the advice you gave REALLY helped. Lovely woman xxx …Thinking of changing the opening slightly – putting it into 2 lines…
After the roar and the grunt of the thundering masses -
the players look small.
or-
After the roar and the grunt
of the thundering masses -
the players look small.
The silence is stark in the stalls (etc)
Not sure though – feel that third line needs more space around it somehow. Guess I’ll have time to tinker with it before submitting though- and might still take a few completely different approaches.
It’s been SO great to do this, feel it’s reignited my enthusiasm for writing, so thankyou so much again for recommending me XXXX:)
Aliceboive – that’s very nice of you to say – thanks alot:)
It’s a pleasure to read your poems,
…I think you’re right about having space around the third line. And, yes, I’d end line one after ‘grunt’ and put ‘thundering masses’ on the next line as its quite a mouthful!
Pam xxx